He Leapt Over the Wall to Snag One

We were doing the manuscript shuffle yesterday. An editor asked to see a manuscript late last week, so Diane and I worked on revisions all weekend, her birthday weekend, before emailing the manuscript to Bert on Monday; he’s been reading a WIP of mine and said, “hey, check for semi-colon use. Your new stuff is full of them.”

Like wildebeasts fleeing lions semi-colons were everywhere, grazing on page one, lurking on page three, thundering across the veldt all the way to the climax. Obviously a deranged writer had cracked open the file and inserted dozens of compound sentences; yikes, there’s one now. Anyway to top things off Bert emailed a narrative synopsis he cranked out at five in the afternoon. If you love synopsis writing, and who doesn’t, you know what a gift that is. Bert leapt over the wall to snag that one, so hat tip to him.

For Diane

In the shadow of the first life

Through the dawn of the second

You are the circle

I stand within.

Light fills the sky

Your light, your sky,

I am the circle

You stand within.

Our journey together

Is full of beginnings

The days belong to us

The chill of night

Is kept outside

We are the circle

We stand within.

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